The issues I personally see


• Alignment
  • This is not a major point but using centered text doesn't always look great. Sometimes you can get away with a properly formatted list style. A recommended change would be instead of just centering the text make it match and follow a curve instead of creating hourglass shapes. It's a minor thing but it does pay off in terms of the final product looking decent
    
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    https://i.imgur.com/8Sg9TLn.png
• Uneven Spacing
  • A major issue people don't think about when designing threads is the way you approach spacing. It may not seem like much but fixing this could attract an easier read.
    • The fix: even spacing of objects and text paths.
• Card spacing
  • Sometimes it is better to have a single card. Others it is best to do a single thread design. I say this because you header space has this overextended padding effect to it. Decrease that and normalize the spacing. It does not look good especially in a paid piece there is no real reason for four pages depicting what could be showcased on one.

16 wrote Now while i can't necessarily comment on the pricing of the design I must admit the third slide does get my attention. It seems like the most formatting and overall thought process went into that one. I say this because the first and second slides are relatively elementary in terms of flow.

I'll break down what I mean below.

The issues I personally see


• Alignment
  • This is not a major point but using centered text doesn't always look great. Sometimes you can get away with a properly formatted list style. A recommended change would be instead of just centering the text make it match and follow a curve instead of creating hourglass shapes. It's a minor thing but it does pay off in terms of the final product looking decent
    
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    https://i.imgur.com/8Sg9TLn.png
• Uneven Spacing
  • A major issue people don't think about when designing threads is the way you approach spacing. It may not seem like much but fixing this could attract an easier read.
    • The fix: even spacing of objects and text paths.
• Card spacing
  • Sometimes it is better to have a single card. Others it is best to do a single thread design. I say this because you header space has this overextended padding effect to it. Decrease that and normalize the spacing. It does not look good especially in a paid piece there is no real reason for four pages depicting what could be showcased on one.

This might seem a bit harsh for what it is but at the same time you have done some GREAT work previously (example) so seeing this is a bit of a downgrade and overpricing for something that once more is a relatively elementary design. Overall it isn't really bad but things do need to be considered before putting a price tag that doesn't quite fit the work quality.