I mean.. i don't want to sound like an A** hole, but it isn't really the best. I enjoy new rap, old rap, generally all music. But I know that it takes a lot of work. Writing your song, finding someone who can or will produce your song. I mean, I'm all for giving new rappers a go at it. But it feels like you might have the words, your just putting it out there in the wrong rhythm. And don't repeat the beginning so much. I know you need to, to tie the whole meaning of the song together; to keep it all fluent. From what it sounds like, your new to it all. Your not putting enough emphasis on the ending either. Your just letting it drop off. You have to be feeling your music if your going to get anywhere. Get into it. Look at Eminem. "This is the moment, when people are feeling your sh*t". Get into it. And the whole "thug life, sex, fame, struggle" topics that are often put into verses of new rappers, are what change them into old rappers. If it's true for you, then put a "hint" of it in there. Get a good beat, get a good verse, go over it 20-30 times, put the paper down, and rip it. Right now, the seriousness and or tone you have, you're more at the,"it's a hobby for me". Where as Eminem, J-cole, Drake, Migos. All of the "Hot" rappers, have the,"this is my life style, and no ones going to take it from me" type of tone. Goodluck with everything. You wanted feedback, so i thought I'd give it to you. Goodluck m8