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ok so im not good at writing but school just started and i got assigned to do a short story on Origin/Creation Myth.. i am only a sophomore so dont go all pro on me lol i like thoughts on my stuff to make it better so please say anything...


In the beginning of time, there was nothing in the universe at the time but 3 glowing balls of light. There was a green one, white one, and a blue one. The green ball of light was nature. The white ball of light was life, and the blue ball of life was what supported nature and life. The three glowing balls of light then joined together to create what now is called earth.

The earth was a peaceful planet with only a man and woman in the beginning of earth. They talked to each other and started to think what they would eat to survive, and realized whatever they think comes into existence. So the woman started to think about trees, animals, flowers and all the stuff she thought about became real on earth. The man started to think about mountains, rivers, lakes, and valleys and the same happened to him.

So together they created the beautiful earth and the universe, they had many children that lived on their creation of earth. Everyone was happy until one day the woman became very ill and couldnt think of anything to stop the illness. The illness started to spread around the lands of what now we call the Americas. Man thought that this evil illness cant be stopped by anyone or anything, until he was looking into a river one day and saw his reflection in the water and saw how bad he looks. He started to think and thought that maybe mankind isnt meant to live forever. After a few days the woman passed away and he then created a place for her to go, what we call heaven.

After a few days man started to think but nothing would come into existence. He thought real hard and eventually realized without the woman he couldnt create anything anymore. He started to get very sick after this, but one night he had a dream of the woman. The next day he said to his village that mankind doesnt live forever that everyone must die eventually but only when your time has come. He then said that my time is approaching fast and explained that we live for a short period of time to contribute to the earth then we must have an ending in our life for our descendants to have a happy life on this beautiful earth. Few days later the man died and he left our world with peacefulness and while in heaven with the woman, could watch over the lands of earth and once again think of stuff to create but chose not to unless in dire need.
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