Eh, I think its alright, I wouldnt mind some other opinions though. Im the one that posted this on TeenInk, before you accuse me of copying and pasting xD Thats where I put all of my poetry. But yeah, here you go.

The higher up you go
The better the view will be
Beautiful things, but yet so small
Will be all that you see
The higher up you go
The closer to heaven you are;
The closer to the moon youll be
You'll fit in, Angelic Star.
The higher up you go
You seem to have it all
But the higher up you go,
The farther you have to fall
When the truth sets in
And you see the world's sin
You'll begin to fall
This is gravity's law.

If you like it, I have more.

~Tusillody Aka, Death