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Yes i understand this is TTG and not a schooling system haha but i am in the midst of writing a very big essay and I need some assistance from all the cool people on TTG!

I am writing a persuasive essay on why video games aren't an ethical problem or Ethical responsibility for video game content yes or no


Is this a good thesis statement

There is no evidence proving that violent video games make people aggressive because people who play video games for less than an hour a day are more likely to be less aggressive. Video games give people a chance to overcome their social anxieties and meet friends online and a study, published in the journal Psychology of Popular Media Culture, found that "children who play online games involving linking up with other players were less slightly likely to have problems relating to other children than those who played alone."

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It is decent but at the bottom it would be "Slight less likely"
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KyloCrux wrote It is decent but at the bottom it would be "Slight less likely"

hahah thanks man, but that was a direct quote from the study so I don't think i can change it, it was their mistake
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Decent statement, I like it and the message that comes across when reading it.
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Change it to this exactly as shown:

There is currently no evidence that can support the theory that video games cause increased violence. Video games give people with social anxieties a chance to meet friends online, which can alleviate symptoms in the real world. A study was conducted which found that "children who play online games involving linking up with other players were less likely to have problems relating to other children than those who played alone." (Insert APA formatted in line reference here)
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the violent video game topic is a very common topic in discursive essay type things.

Do you not get less marks for writing about such a commonly used topic ? in my school we do. (likely you're in higher education at this point)
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thats real true idk what else to say great job
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I think it's fairly decent, but maybe you could get your teacher to check it out and see what they think before writing your paper since the paper is based off the thesis.
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I guess playing xbox by myself isn't a good thing.
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