FMWK wrote Really nice illustration man

I am currently trying to think of an idea to design with the pen tool but my mind is blank.

Rating: 8/10, add some shading

-FMWK

Chi wrote

Glad to finally see a speed-art outside of the typical youtube banner pack search video.
As for the design it's decent, however some things seem a bit off.

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First thing I will say is that your line work is nice.
The base is nice, though the head almost feels too 'boxy'.
You have to be careful in not blending these styles between curvy and clean/ boxy and rough.
Otherwise it all just seems a bit odd, it all has to flow.

The eyes look decent, however I feel like they could've been more at an angle,
to kind of give it more of an expression.
The ears look fine, but I feel it would've look 10x better without the triangualr lobe's.
The nose is decent I suppose but the thin lines on the outside throw it off.
Now on to that mouth/teeth. As I've stated above, that boxy feel is present and kind of strange..
I feel it could be a bit smoother, maybe even be a single curved shape.
And those teeth just kill it. The lines are suuuupperrr unnecessary..
They really just bring down the whole piece. Some simple detailing would've made them way better.

Now, I feel the palette could've been better,
especially for the teeth, white would've done no damage.
I also feel that the piece is missing the shading/lighting that is needed for this style.
Have just a flat kind of layout removes the serious potential that this piece has.

The last thing I will do is touch on the whole horizontal flip trick thing.
Doing this takes away so many things that could make a piece like this great.
It also takes away so much of the potential for the piece to have actual expression,
rather than just look like a lifeless character.
I know that it may be an easier to do, and a more popular thing to do,
but it really just (imo) kills the creativity that can be had making something like this.

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So yeah... Hope you got something out of that.
This piece has serious potential to be great, it's just all about exploration,
and taking that extra 30-whatever minutes to really bring the piece to life.

Much luck,
-Chi

CriticaI wrote

You need to add shading.

When making the lines for the teeth and horns,
don't copy and paste.

Draw each line my hand,
and don't make them solid line,
make them little triangles almost,
that way you have various widths.

Illustrated wrote

CriticaI wrote

You need to add shading.

When making the lines for the teeth and horns,
don't copy and paste.

Draw each line my hand,
and don't make them solid line,
make them little triangles almost,
that way you have various widths.

Copy and pasting them would do no harm.
Actually, if you copy one half, then paste and flip it, you have all the spacing and everything lined up from there.
So then go at bits and pieces with the eraser then start drawing them in a little different, and everything is right where you need it.

Illustrated wrote

CriticaI wrote

You need to add shading.

When making the lines for the teeth and horns,
don't copy and paste.

Draw each line my hand,
and don't make them solid line,
make them little triangles almost,
that way you have various widths.

Copy and pasting them would do no harm.
Actually, if you copy one half, then paste and flip it, you have all the spacing and everything lined up from there.
So then go at bits and pieces with the eraser then start drawing them in a little different, and everything is right where you need it.

I know a lot of people are going to tell me to add shading, but it's something I'm not too good at so I almost always avoid it.